User blog:Na134/Rewrite Of SoPC episode one

Ok, The chapter its self isn't a filler, but It's a bit odd.. Heartshine!"

Heartshine obediently follows the Queen's order.

"Yes, my queen"

"The Love Circle festival will began soon, and this year a pixie like fairy will lead,"

"I need you to plan it for me."

"But, queen mizuyu, why can't you do it, of course I wouldn't disobey you, but why!"( For gods sake Danyea, add a question mark, you're in 8th grade)

"Because, there was a perceived threat, and I must deal with it urgently, and-"

An ugly, scraggly old man with an 80's suit appears, along with a dark red bat,( Ok, Umm, why is there a comma here? Ugly and scraggly, 80's suit, I was born in the early 2000's!)

"Queen, will you marry me?"( Ummm, alright, why does Shizuku want to marry her sister, this got odd)

"Never Shizuku, never in-"

"Well then say goodbye to your Circle festival!""

"Queen Mizuyu!"

"Heartshine, go to earth and find the legendary pretty cure, the land of love's fate depends on you, the festival!"

"Yes Queen, I will find the pretty cure at all costs!"

Shizuku picks up the queen and flies away.

"FIND THE LEGENDARY PRETTY CURE, HEARTSHINE!"

I'll have to do a rewrite, not a full one, but one that makes the chapter less creepy, I'll post with the updated episode soon.